Person
Growing up we have people who come in and out of our lives, but most people stay in our hearts forever. A year or so ago someone very special entered my life and had a huge impact on my life. He influenced me to change my life around and stay to care about my life, school work, family and friends. This boy helped me get back on track in my life and stop doing the stupid things that I use to do. Without this boy I would be lost, and wouldn't be where I am today. Michael Curran is more than just my hero or my boyfriend. He is my best friend. He is probley the most wonderful caring person that anyone would ever meet.
Michael isn't the type who just cares about himself. He cares about everyone around him, even if you are his "enemy". He will litterally stop what he is doing and talk to you and help you through problems. I can remember when I was with my ex-boyfriend he use to talk to me all night long until I would stop crying. He use to tell me "Hun, it's okay. He's a asshole, you don't deserve someone like that." After a couple of months I finally started to listen to him and ended things with my ex-boyfriend. Michael and I talked for a while and after a while we ended up dating. This boy has taught me so many awesome things about life, and he has taught me that "We're not going to live forever, so do what you want, and live your life to the fullest, and don't care what others think about you because I think your amazing and that's all that matters." Without this boy in my life I really don't think that I would have the beliefs that I do today. Before I got with him I thought that love was just a stupid word that no one ment. I was deffintely wrong tho. He has shown me what love is, and how a girl is supose to be treated. I really wish that all people would act the way he does. He shows everyone so much respect towards everyone, especially women. Michael is seriosuly my hero, and he will always have a special place in my heart because of all the wonderful things he has done for me. Anyone who knows this boy is seriously lucky to have him in their lives as friend. This is one person that I will hold onto forever.
1 comment:
Starts strong but you lose your way in the middle. The middle demands either one big story or a pile of smaller details. YOu give us a little of both here and keep circling back to repeat your praise of Michael because you're not sure you've really nailed the piece.
Try a rewrite--break it into three paragraphs. In the middle graf, just go for the quotations from Michael, and, hard as it is, try scrapping most of the praise. See how that works.
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